My friend and I are looking for an apartment to share near campus. After flipping through descriptions of two apartments which named Fairfax Apartments and CAMPUS APTS, we would like to Fairfax Apartments. There are several reasons why we would choose this one. In the first place, Fairfax Apartments have 2 bedrooms, and the extensive space can contain us. Furthermore, Owing to both of us cannot endure the burning sun in summer, we choose Fairfax Apartments which is air conditioned. Moreover, Fairfax Apartments is furnished that is a great for us. We don’t have to think twice about and buy new furniture. The only flaw of Fairfax Apartments is that the rent is more expensive than that of CAMPUS APTS. Nonetheless, we don’t care about it because we have a comfortable circumstance to live in.
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回覆刪除apartments which "are" named Fairfax Apartments and CAMPUS APT
回覆刪除we would like to "choose" Fairfax Apartments
大概....醬
we would like to Fairfax Apartments要加上choose會比較好哦
回覆刪除Owing to both of us cannot endure→owing to後面是加名詞或ving哦
Fairfax Apartments is furnished that is a great for us.
→Fairfax Apartments is furnished, which is great for us
大概這樣~
After flipping through descriptions of two apartments which named Fairfax Apartments and CAMPUS APTS, we would like to Fairfax Apartments.
回覆刪除是which are named吧,然後 would like to應該要加個choose
Fairfax Apartments is furnished that is a great for us.
這邊great前面的a應該要去掉吧!