There are resumes from two persons applying for a job about a new English instructor. After glancing over the resumes, I would hire Debra Fines. There are several reasons why I decide to choose her. First, Debra has more education than Lynn . She can teach students correct concepts. Furthermore, she has more employment experience than Lynn . For instance, she had been a consultant, author, teaching assistant, swimming teacher, and server before. I think she had learned intensive knowledge and can deal with a variety of difficulties from her experience. Moreover, she even had published books about English. It is certain that she has specialized in English for several years. In addition to English, she can speak other foreign languages fluently as well, such as French. From these advantages above, I choose Debra to be the best decision.
why I decide to choose her
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所以要改成decided
其他沒了
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I would hire Debra Fines
回覆刪除這裡用would不太對
she had learned intensive knowledge and can deal with a variety of difficulties from her experience
前後動詞時態不一致
she even had published books
應該是she had even....才對
就醬....
Excellent.
回覆刪除我覺得畢竟這是一篇"比較"的文章
回覆刪除所以Lynn 的部分好像太少了
a job about a new English instructor是不是a job as a new English instructor啊?
回覆刪除然後時態好像有點不一哦
讀起來很順,
回覆刪除文章很流暢喔。
I think she had learned ...and can deal with...
覺得時態怪怪的呢…
如有誤,請不吝嗇指教。