I went through an unforgettable experience while I was merely a freshman. One day, I went to the bus stop to wait for the bus after school. Instead of going back home, I went shoppoing in a department store for some daily necessities first. After buying all the supplies, I went to the railway station and got on the bus which could pass by my home. The sky gradually grew dark. I trid to take my cell phone from my pocket. Suddenly, I found that I couldn't find it at all. My cell phone was lost! I lost my head and didn't know how to deal with the problem on the bus. The only thing I could do is to get home as soon as possible and ask for help from my family. After knowing the bad news, Mom dialled the bus telephone service. Foutuanately, there was a student picked up my cell phone from the bus which I took from my school. I contact with her without delaying and expressed my great gratitude to her. From this unforgettable experience, I learn to a lesson that I should take care of everything with care every time.
Instead of..., I went shoppoing in...
回覆刪除應該是"shopping"才對。
I trid to take...
是不是"tried"?
Foutuanately,...
是"fortunately"喏?
I contact with her ...
"contact"+"ed"。
只改一些拼字而已。
沒提出什麼具體建議,對不起喔。
手機找回來真是太好了呢。
I trid to take my cell phone from my pocket.
回覆刪除應該是要打tried吧
Foutuanately, 應該是 fortunately
I learn to a lesson that I should take care of everything with care every time.
learn後面應該不用再加一個to ~~~
:D
應該是到bus station to take a bus 吧
回覆刪除couldn't find it at all有這種用法
the only thing I could do "was"...
ask someone for help應該會比較好
dial加ed 不用重複 "l"
contact要變成過去式
應該是I have learned a lesson
p.s.不客氣=]
I "trid" to take my cell phone
回覆刪除是tried
The only thing I could do "is" to get home
是was
Foutuanately應該是fortunately
there was a student "picked" up my cell phone from the bus
there was 後面的動詞應該是+V-ing
I "contact" with her
過去式
I learn to a lesson that I should take care of everything with care every time. learn後面不用to
回覆刪除其他上面應該大家都有講了=)
是I "tried" to 不是 I "tred" to吧
回覆刪除take 後面加個out會不會好一點
1.The sky gradually grew dark. I trid to take my cell phone from my pocket.
回覆刪除→The sky gradually grew dark. I tried to take my cell phone from my pocket.
2.The only thing I could do is to get home as soon as possible and ask for help from my family.
→The only thing I could do is to get home as soon as possible and ask my family for help.
3.Foutuanately, there was a student picked up my cell phone from the bus which I took from my school.
→Foutuanately, there was a student picking up my cell phone from the bus which I took from my school.
4.I contact with her without delaying and expressed my great gratitude to her.
→I contacted her without delaying and expressed my great gratitude to her.
5.From this unforgettable experience, I learn to a lesson that...
→From this unforgettable experience, I learned a lesson that...
(以上,淺見…)
I went to the railway station and got on the bus which could pass by my home. 去火車站撘公車有點怪怪的。
回覆刪除然後最後一句:I learn to a lesson這邊learn後面不用加to
以上:D
I went shoppoing in a department store
回覆刪除被我發現你的shopping多+了一o喔~
I trid to take my cell phone from my pocket.
裡的take 可以再+一個out!
還有是tried~
I contact with her without delaying and expressed my great gratitude to her.
裡的contact要+ed喔!
以上!
真是太好了!
幸好有找回來!
=)