My name is Doris. I have five members in my family. When I was a child, my father is seldom at home because he is a military officer. Accordingly, he is pretty strict with me. He always tells me, “You should have a sense of responsibility. “ I try to do as he tells me. He is the model whom I quite respect in my mind once and ever. My mother, a housewife, always takes care of the whole family. My elder brother is a Junior and studies at Management Information System. To pay his tuition, he has to do part-time jobs. My grandmother, who is always generous to me is just stay home.
my father "is" seldom at home
回覆刪除是was喔
然後沒了(燦
junior要大寫嗎?
回覆刪除然後我覺得要來個小小的結論
1.When I was a child, my father is seldom at home 裡的is seldom要改成was喔! 因為是過去式嘛~
回覆刪除2.I try to do as he tells me. 我會想寫說"I try to do what he tells." 哈哈~ 僅供參考!!
3.給個結論句吧!
I have five members in my family.我覺得後面可以詳加敘述有哪些人
回覆刪除When I was a child, my father is seldom at home because he is a military officer.時態要一致喔!!!!
Accordingly, he is pretty strict with me.介係詞是用with嗎??確認一下喔!!!
I try to do as he tells me.如果是我的話我會寫
I try to follow what he always reminds me.
少了結論句喔!!!